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Julia Guidry's avatar

Loving where this is going!

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So, on the word 'forgetful'...

>>For nearly two hours Colton raced through the tunnels, forgetful of his wounds and the stabbing pain in his ankle,

I think what is meant here is 'ignoring'. The impression I get is that he was very much aware of his wounds, including the ankle (which kept reminding him. Hard to forget. Especially when nothing it happening'.

And I find 'raced' and 'the tunnels' a bit bland and unhelpful. I am forced to choose between one long tunnel, through which one can 'race' (altho not on that ankle) for two hours... or a frustrating series of short tunnels, dead end, turn around, go back, choose another tunnel, rinse and repeat.

And is this while wading hip deep in sewage? Well, no, because of 'raced'. Scaring the occasional rat which one ignores because one is 'racing'? Do the tunnels go up and down, or are they boringly flat....

Inquiring minds want to imagine.

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