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David Perlmutter's avatar

Make the language a little bit more archaic and this could be like Shakespeare.

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Von's avatar

I love language in a book... language that draws you into the culture of the story.

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Julia Guidry's avatar

This is so great!!

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Von's avatar

Beginnings, beginnings. Your beginning should pull us in, just as your ending pulls us on.

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hannah's avatar

Great cliffhanger!

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Victoria Jensen's avatar

Thank you!

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