Their ongoing argument with the king had ended, and Colton was aware there had been no real victor. They were led deep into the palace, beneath its foundations and into the tunnels. The dark walls and dank air brought back fleeting memories of madness and hopelessness, but Colton willed those haunting memories from thought and set his mind on their present danger. In such a world as Vellatha one could expect to be in constant danger, but they seemed to have far exceeded even that normality and reached a level of misfortune none of them had foreseen.
Make the language a little bit more archaic and this could be like Shakespeare.
I love language in a book... language that draws you into the culture of the story.
This is so great!!
Beginnings, beginnings. Your beginning should pull us in, just as your ending pulls us on.
Great cliffhanger!
Thank you!